Wednesday, October 28, 2009

First Draft Take Two!

There's nothing like making something public to magically let you see all the damn mistakes you made. So, I have replaced the Under the Dying Sun draft with v1.2 in which I actually did some basic editing (like taking the name "Athas" out of the text)!

1 comment:

  1. Looking good! But a few more errors:

    In the table of contents and right after the heading "Species" the mul-analogues are called "Esne" but in their description section (after the Desert Men) they are called "Helots"

    P26 under the "Arms" and "Materials" heading you have a sentence "This the most common materials..." I assume "This" should be "Thus".

    There may be more, but that's where I quit being picky.